First, what a beautiful baby! Sorry, couldn’t help myself. I am absolutely captivated by the expression. You are to be commended for capturing the decisive moment. Expression is the “cake” great lighting, composition, etc are the icing. Lighting is a bit weak. I would like to see a bit more separation between the subject and the background. This can be done with the addition of a hair light, or striplight. I personally use Chimera Hot lights and love the fact that I can actually see where the light if falling on the subject. Try using the modeling lamps only, as a way to train your eye. Additionally, I wouldn’t recommend doing the coloring in of the eyes. It is a bit (in my opinion, and in my opinion only) cheezy. With those things said, don’t beat yourself up. Your image is lovely! It is captivating, and captures the essence of this little one beautifully. Congratulations.
Bambi